A Vicious Insect Attack!!

[Havok]

Great story Entity and funny as hell too!

King will never read all of that. Far too many words.

Too many words.

You called it BadMoon!

 

[DCM81]

Here follows the account of a vicious insect-attack** that just took place in my room:


It was Wednesday the 3rd of March of the year 2010 at approximately 11:45 am GMT+1.
The Entity was sitting behind his desk, surfing the internet, enjoying his time here at the Sideshow Freaks Board, when he suddenly heard a sound.

The low rumbling sound, that seemed to come towards him sounded like a plane or helicopter in the distance, so he didn't pay any attention to it and remained enjoying his time at the SFB...
It was at this point that, by the use of his peripheral vision, he saw a huge black... entity flying towards him. In a reflex, The Entity rolled his deskchair away from the desk, jumped to the ground and took cover as the evil entity flew over him.

Without thinking The Entity took the loaded shotgun, which he keeps stored under the bed for safety, and moved towards the other entity.

The other entity had landed on the windowsill and claimed it as it's own. It was during this moment that the other entity revealed his true form. A beetle approximately 1' long gnarled at The Entity and flapped it's huge wings to intimidate him...

The Entity wasn't intimidated easily, but this was quite the insect...

"It was a big son of a *****," The Entity recalls.​

The Entity aimed his shotgun when he started to think what a mess it would make to his room if he shot the creature.
He quickly minded his surroundings and noticed that the window was right behind the windowsill.
The true battle began. A psychological battle... The Entity stared the Black Beetle Of Death in the eyes and slowly moved towards him. If brainwaves were visible, a beholder would have seen the greatest battle ever fought...

Alas, brainwaves are not visible. And there weren't any beholders...

The Entity had reached the windowsill... slowly he reached for the handle to open the window. He was carefull not to make any sudden movements...

"I was carefull not to make any sudden movements," The Entity recalls.​

Slowly, The Entity opened the window and took a step back. The Armoured Beetle Of Doom didn't seem to give up so easily... or he didn't understand...
The Entity became worried... The open window wasn't only a way out for this devilish lifeform... It could also be a doorway for others...
The Entity decided to act. He gently tapped the beetle with the barrel of his gun and finally the beast knew it was defeated. It took flight, high up in the air and The Entity watched as this vicious, vile creature increased the distance between it and him in a strangely noble manner... Probably to spread fear in the hearts of men... once more.




**Based on actual events

Funny interpretation of everyday events

If I may so bold as to make a few comments

What put me slightly off was the double usage of certain words. "when he suddenly heard a sound.

The low rumbling sound," - maybe just go right into the description of what you heard....basically just have a bigger gap between using the same word.
Same kind of thing with the protagonists/antagonists names. If you're already the entity then the creature shouldn't have been called the same as this can also cause a wee bit of confusion.

None the less, the most important thing for a good story-teller is a good imagination........and that you definately possess

 

[devilof76]

Too many words.

I just kept skipping ahead to see if he shot it. Or if it killed him.

You didn't miss anything.

 

[King Darkness]

Good to know.

 

[The Entity]

Great story Entity and funny as hell too!

Thanks, Havok!!

Funny interpretation of everyday events

If I may so bold as to make a few comments

What put me slightly off was the double usage of certain words. "when he suddenly heard a sound.

The low rumbling sound," - maybe just go right into the description of what you heard....basically just have a bigger gap between using the same word.
Same kind of thing with the protagonists/antagonists names. If you're already the entity then the creature shouldn't have been called the same as this can also cause a wee bit of confusion.

None the less, the most important thing for a good story-teller is a good imagination........and that you definately possess

Thanks for those comments, man!

I deliberately called the beetle an entity at first to cause the confusion. I found it to be a funny thing to do actually

Are you a professional writer?

I just kept skipping ahead to see if he shot it. Or if it killed him.

You didn't miss anything.

Good to know.

 

[DCM81]

Are you a professional writer?

Not by a long shot Entity Just like reading a fair bit.

 

[The Ween]

Funny interpretation of everyday events

If I may so bold as to make a few comments

What put me slightly off was the double usage of certain words. "when he suddenly heard a sound.

The low rumbling sound," - maybe just go right into the description of what you heard....basically just have a bigger gap between using the same word.
Same kind of thing with the protagonists/antagonists names. If you're already the entity then the creature shouldn't have been called the same as this can also cause a wee bit of confusion.

None the less, the most important thing for a good story-teller is a good imagination........and that you definately possess

Ahhhhh....but maybe he really IS the bug!

 

[Bamboota]

Ahhhhh....but maybe he really IS the bug!

And the plot thickens!

~~And you right Weenie....ur story would be better with Smell-o-Vision. I mean ....who wouldn't want to take a woof of ur farts!

 

[The Entity]

Ahhhhh....but maybe he really IS the bug!

You mean in a metaphorical way in which the bug represents the dark side of my psyche?
Hmm... an interesting theory... but... nah, it was an actual bug I fought

So, rest assured Weenie... I'm no bug